Thursday, January 26, 2017

Week 2 Story: Fama and Oolak




Long ago before the existence of man lived two entities, Fama and Oolak. Fama represented purity, loyalty, and everything good in the world. On the other hand, Oolak stood for chaos, darkness, and everything evil. The two fought over power for millions of years, until the first man and woman appeared. Tired from fighting for a few millennia, Fama and Oolak agreed on a truce to study this new species of their world. At the first glimpse of one another, the man and woman began fighting. Fama and Oolak concluded that the energy of their quarrelling for millions of years created these two beings. The man, who Fama named Brahma, stood for all the same values she did. While the woman, who Oolak named Ravana, represented chaos and evil much like he. As Brahma and Ravana continued to fight the all-powerful entities began to fade. Before perishing, Fama and Oolak secretly gave their favored humans powers. Fama gave Brahma the power to control all things heavenly such as air and water. Oolak gave Ravana the power of destruction, such as manipulation of fire and light. In addition to their powers, both humans were given a spouse named after the entities themselves. As the years of fighting went on Brahma and Ravana grew weak. One final battle killed them both and as a result more humans were created from the energy. Those who followed Brahma resided in Koshala, ruled by King Dasharatha. Those born from the dark energy of Ravana dwelled in the city of Mithja, ruled by King Tanaka. 
The battle of light and dark continued between the two great cities for years. The two cities were suffering greatly from constant war, the two kings decided a truce must be created or both would perish. It was decided that the only way to join the two kingdoms was by marriage and the birth of infants who shared mixed energy of Fama and Oolak. Both kings each had an unmarried son and daughter. King Dasharatha’s son, Filaf, married King Tanaka’s daughter, Sathra.  The new couple consummated the marriage and nine months later twins were born. The boy was named Rama and the girl was named Jara. King Tanaka’s son married King Dasharatha’s daughter and the two also had twins. The boy was named Kaloo and the girl was named Tali. For ten years there was peace in the lands of Mythra, until the pairs of twins began showing odd abilities. The young and fair skinned boy, Rama was able to manipulate the air. His sister, Jara, had beautiful skin as dark as night was able to take the light from the sky and expel it from her glowing eyes. King Tanaka’s grandson, Kaloo, was known as the runt of the family. He was very slim and rather short with the temper of a wild boar. His control of fire was discovered when he burned down the local market during one of his tantrums. Tali was the opposite of her brother, Kaloo. She smiled and had a bubbly but clumsy personality. It was discovered she could control water when she tripped over a fishing rod and fell into the lake. Instead of falling into the water she landed on it as if it were solid ground.
 The twin siblings began to grow apart with age. Constantly fighting and destroying the great-unified city reminded the people of old times. Protests soon turned into riots as the destruction caused by the siblings grew. The aging Kings held a meeting and decided to exile their grandkids to the wilds and not come back until their quarreling was ended. At the age of 16 the four teens were separately banished to the far corners of the earth. Rama was sent to the volcanic islands, Golpitha, where the air was tainted with sulfur. Jara was exiled to the northern glaciers where light only shined for a couple hours per day. Kaloo was banished to the southern islands of Pergona, where it rained 20 hours each day. Tali was sent to the vast and dry Sathar Desert, where the scorched sands would suck any moisture out of the air.

"Light vs Dark" by AG-Wing, Source: DeviantArt

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Authors Note
This story is loosely based off the stories of Ramayana. This story focuses on two cities and an avatar named Rama. Rama is fierce with a bow and kills many dark creatures. He ends up marrying the kings daughter after completing the challenge of breaking the sacred bow. Rama is soon exiled by his father for fourteen years. Fortunately for Rama, his wife Sita and brother accompany him. I used some characters from this story and ideas of dark and light to fuel the overlying theme.



3 comments:

  1. Vann, I really loved your interpretation of these characters as well as your writing style. It is very detailed and I have no trouble imagining in my head of the action that you describe! I’m very interested in how you choose the theme of light and dark, it was a very interesting take. I look forward to reading more!

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  2. Vann,

    I really enjoyed reading the story, as I have background knowledge about it. I like how you brought in the concept of the appearance of the first man and women – it immediately reminded me of the book Genesis in the Bible.

    I wonder what happened at the end of the story? Was there finally peace? What happened to Tali and Kaloo? Maybe you can give the reader more insight into what happened afterward.

    What if, instead of indenting your paragraphs, you start a new one by leaving more space in between? Although it is fun to read, it is difficult to follow, because the reader can easily get lost. You have done a good job with characterization, but you could improve your story by giving more details. Maybe explain what they look like? Also, you did not use any dialogue in your story. Maybe the story would benefit from this?

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  3. My favorite part about your story was your usage of similes. The battles reminded me of the Divergent books I read. There is a lot of nature involved in your story, and that also reminded me of Divergent. Your story was a great twist on the original story with a hint of the elements from Divergent. I think these flashbacks are why I enjoyed your post.

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